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2022/02/10
#0 judy [Fzc5aRQ]
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性別 / 年齢
女性 / 10-14
出身
台湾
居住地
南投(台湾)
言語
中国語
英語
2022/02/10 更新
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英語
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My English is not good,l try to briefly introduce myself.I'm a primary school student ,My greatest interest is computer graphics like anime.But my family can't understand this style,they think painting is about painting landscapes or more artistically valuable themes,prevent me from practicing.I like to draw,but i just take draw as a hobby,People will have spiritual consumption outside of work and study also me,so drawing is a relaxing way for me.I can draw whatever I want,no need to pursue deliberately.Maybe i'm wrong,I'm just making some comments as an English practice.

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#1 Nicole [OJc1FUI]
My English is not good, l try to briefly introduce myself. I'm a primary school student. ,My greatest interest is computer graphics like anime. But my family can't understand this style,t. They think painting ishould be about painting landscapes or more artistically valuable themes,. This prevents me from practicing. I like to draw, but iI just taksee drawing as a hobby,. People will haveneed spiritual consumption outside of work and study also me,s, just like me. So drawing is a relaxing way for me. I can draw whatever I want, no need to pursue deliberateit purposefully. Maybe i'm wrong, I'm just making some comments as an English practice.
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Very good! Just some minor changes. Keep practicing! And keep drawing :)
2022/02/17
#2 MY [QiSYIFU]
My English is not good,l try to briefly introduce myself.I'm a primary school student. ,My greatest interest is computer graphics like anime.B I like to draw anime but my family cadoesn't understand this style,they think painting is about it because they believe drawing or painting is a kind of art like "painting landscapes" or something more artistically valuable themes,prevent me from practicing.I like to draw,but i just take draw as a hobby,People will have spiritual consumption outside of work and study also me,so drawing is a relaxing way for me. ones. That makes me disappointed sometimes but I like to draw anime. I am just drawing it as a hobby. I get relaxed when I am drawing. I can draw whatever I want,n.  No need to pursue deliberately.Maybe i'm wrong,I'm just making some comments as an English practiceforce myself.
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訂正済 訂正不要
- Next time, put a line break on each sentence. And it will make easier for everybody to correct your text.

- A space is always necessary after a comma and period.

- I tried but I didn't get the following sentences. Could you rephrase it, if possible?
"People will have spiritual consumption outside of work and study also me,"
"No need to pursue deliberately"

- Maybe you are NOT wrong. 加油! Keep going!
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